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The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the outcomes of a survey about consumers'
coffee
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 and tea purchasing and consuming routines in five
cities
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 in Australia.
Overall
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, they have provided five
cities
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 in Australia. Which are Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart.
Moreover
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, most of the
people
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 in
cities
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 except Adelaide prefer to go to café to consume
coffee
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 or tea and
also
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 all the citizens in the mentioned
cities
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 prefer to have fresh
coffee
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.
According to
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 the graph, roughly 60% of humans preferred to go to a café for a drink in the
last
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 4 weeks and Fresh
coffee
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 is consumed by
people
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 approximately 43% in Sydney.
In addition
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, instant
coffee
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 is sold to 45% of citizens in the above-mentioned city.
Further
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, the same habit happened in Melbourne as well. Among all five
cities
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 below 45% of
people
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 bought fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks.
Moreover
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, the
people
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 of Adelaide had a small change in
this
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 graph which is they preferred to consume instant
coffee
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 1% more in comparison to
people
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 who went to the shop and had a
coffee
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 or tea.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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