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Present-day schools are as effective as it needs to be. Also, teachers at school do not attach enough Importance to the classes they run. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#schools #teachers #school #importance #classes
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modern
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era
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 educational
facilites
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facilities
 are
so
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very
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 efficient .
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,
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teachers
 at school do not pay attention sufficiently to the class .So ,I tend to agree with the 1st opinion because of some convincing
reasons
,but I can not go
along with
 the 2nd
idea
 for plausible
reasons
.In
this
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the
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reasons
of
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 given statements whether I agree or disagree.
Priliminary
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Preliminary
, I want to mention that the 1st
idea
 can be true for 2 solid
reasons
.I am about to explain them.In recent years,it is undeniable that all are characterised
with
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 the modern
equipments
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equipment
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 like smart boards,projectors,computers and so on. All of these are considered the
sign
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signs
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 and development of modern technology.So I can say all educational places have these needs.
Secondly
 ,they are so safe.I mean the
territority
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territory
 of
building
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buildings
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 or guards.
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,if any school or university are laid in
safety
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 street or uncrowded terrain it is more appreciated by many members of
public
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the public
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. If it comes to the 2nd
idea
 I do not agree with the given
idea
 because of my special
reasons
.It is claimed that nowadays
teachers
 do not attach enough importance to the classes they run.But I believe that
modern day
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teachers
 are not only
teachers
,
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but
also
are
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motivators and supporters.It means that they spend a lot of time with their students and
helps
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help
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 them to make
right
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the right
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decision
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decisions
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 about their life or career.In another case working with modern
equipments
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equipment
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 requires more attention and information.So
teachers
 inform the students with different methods. In
conclusion
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 present-day schools are as effective as they need to be and
teachers
are tend
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 to inform the students more willingly .
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