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This is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit.You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre,in your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is. •say what happened the last time you complained. •explain what you want the manager to do.

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I am writing to
complaint
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complain
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 about a problem with the changing rooms of the sports centre I visit. My name is Umida I visit your sports centre every day.There is a mess with your changing room in the
sport
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sports
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 centre
,
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because there was absolutely no environment and the
athletes
Use synonyms
not
Add a missing verb
were not
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 at all pleased.The floor and closet
was
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were
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 very old
together
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with
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and
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 there was not even an air conditioner
it
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 was
very
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apply
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essential on a hot day,
as well as
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 there was no heating. The changing room must have heating because in winter,the room is very bitter and
this
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 causes discomfort for
athletes
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. The
last
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 time I complained I didn't get any response and it didn't work.What a disrespect
?
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!
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 Please reply
me
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to me
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 as soon as possible because it causes inconvenience to
athletes
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. I would like to request that the manager
to
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solve all the problems which I mentioned,
together with
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 I want a new floor and shelves to be installed.I don’t want there to be
a shortages
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a shortage
shortages
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 in the changing rooms I want
athletes
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 to be
happay
Correct your spelling
happy
 about it. I would request to repair the changing rooms as soon as possible.I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem. Yours faithfully. Umida Abdumajitiva.

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suitable writing tone
Ensure to use a polite and formal tone consistently throughout the letter. Avoid phrases like 'What a disrespect?' which can be seen as overly confrontational.
complete response
When describing problems, try to keep descriptions clear and concise. Adding specific details like the exact issues with the floor, closets, and lack of air conditioning/heating makes your complaint more compelling.
logical structure
Consider starting paragraphs with a clear topic sentence to introduce the main idea of that section. This helps to enhance logical structure and readability.
complete response
You have effectively described the problem and the context which helps in understanding the issue clearly.
greeting and closing
Your letter follows a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs explaining the issues and previous complaints, and a conclusion with your requests, which is a good practice for formal letters.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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