This is a problem with the changing rooms in the sports centre that you visit.You have complained several times but with no success. Write a letter to the manager of the sports centre,in your letter: •describe what the problem with the changing rooms is. •say what happened the last time you complained. •explain what you want the manager to do.
I am writing to
complaint
about a problem with the changing rooms of the sports centre I visit.
My name is Umida I visit your sports centre every day.There is a mess with your changing room in the Replace the word
complain
sport
centreChange the noun form
sports
,
because there was absolutely no environment and the Remove the comma
apply
athletes
Use synonyms
not
at all pleased.The floor and closet Add a missing verb
were not
was
very old Change the verb form
were
together
Linking Words
with
there was not even an air conditioner Correct word choice
and
it
was Correct pronoun usage
which
very
essential on a hot day,Rephrase
apply
as well as
there was no heating. The changing room must have heating because in winter,the room is very bitter and Linking Words
this
causes discomfort for Linking Words
athletes
.
The Use synonyms
last
time I complained I didn't get any response and it didn't work.What a disrespectLinking Words
?
Please reply Change the punctuation
!
me
as soon as possible because it causes inconvenience to Change preposition
to me
athletes
.
I would like to request that the manager Use synonyms
to
solve all the problems which I mentioned, Fix the infinitive
apply
together with
I want a new floor and shelves to be installed.I don’t want there to be Linking Words
a shortages
in the changing rooms I want Correct the article-noun agreement
a shortage
shortages
athletes
to be Use synonyms
happay
about it. I would request to repair the changing rooms as soon as possible.I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem.
Yours faithfully.
Umida Abdumajitiva.Correct your spelling
happy
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suitable writing tone
Ensure to use a polite and formal tone consistently throughout the letter. Avoid phrases like 'What a disrespect?' which can be seen as overly confrontational.
complete response
When describing problems, try to keep descriptions clear and concise. Adding specific details like the exact issues with the floor, closets, and lack of air conditioning/heating makes your complaint more compelling.
logical structure
Consider starting paragraphs with a clear topic sentence to introduce the main idea of that section. This helps to enhance logical structure and readability.
complete response
You have effectively described the problem and the context which helps in understanding the issue clearly.
greeting and closing
Your letter follows a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs explaining the issues and previous complaints, and a conclusion with your requests, which is a good practice for formal letters.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.