Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004)

The given tables provide information concerning two products which are labelled as fairtrade in five various countries over a five-year period starting in 1999.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that the UK has the highest revenue from selling coffee and bananas,
whereas
the rest of the countries profited a bit. In terms of the first table, in the first
year
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the UK earned 1.5mln, even though
this
number surged to 20mln by 2004.
Moreover
, Switzerland began with 3mln in 1999
,
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and doubled that ratio in 2004. Moving to the other countries, the income rose steadily. Regarding the second table, the UK
also
was the best banana seller by far in both years with 15 and 47mln.
Furthermore
, Switzerland and Denmark made a benefit of 4.5 and 3.4mln respectively throughout the whole time frame.
In addition
, Belgium and Sweden underwent a moderate fall of 0.8 and 1.1mln adequately during the five-year period.
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