the plans below show the layout of a university's sports center noaw and how it will look after redevelopement

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the maps illustrate the

sport

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center

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of the university now and after

referbishment

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refurbishment

. it is clearly seen that there will be

a significant changes

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in future.

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instance

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the dance studios, cafe,

sport

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hall, leisure

pool

and

sport

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shop are going to be built. as can be seen in the layout of present, there is a 25m

pool

which

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surronded

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by reception from

south

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, changing room from

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, gym and seating from north and east, respectively.

there

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are two

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located

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right

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and left side of the map.

according to

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changing room will not change and stay in the

center

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of the structure. gym will

be expand

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. the leisure

pool

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the left side of the whole structure. two changing

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will be located in 2 corners of the

south-west

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and

south-eastwhich

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south-east which

the cafe and

sport

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shop

willbe

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next to each one of them

amd

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dance

studio

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will be next to the

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hall.

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coherence cohesion

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task achievement

Pay attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar to ensure clarity and accuracy in your writing. For example, 'referbishment' should be 'refurbishment', and 'there is a 25m pool which surronded by reception from south' should be 'there is a 25m pool which is surrounded by reception to the south'.

coherence cohesion

Improve your sentence structure and variety to make your essay more engaging and coherent. Use connectors and transitions more effectively to tie your ideas together.

task achievement

You did a good job in identifying the key changes in the university's sports center and in organizing your points geographically.

coherence cohesion

Your essay has a logical sequence in describing the current and future layouts, making it easy to follow.

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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