The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010 . Summaries the information by selecting and reporting in the main features, make comparisons where relevant .
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This
bar graph shows the percentage participation of male
in senior development Fix the agreement mistake
males
in
IBM, Microsoft and Apple from 1980 to 2010.
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at
Overall
, it becomes clear that male participants in senior development in 1980 was
the lowest Change the verb form
were
compare
to 2010 at all three companies.
In more detail, IBM men participants were around 4 Change the form of the verb
compared
percent
in 1980, they increased by 8 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 1990, by 12 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
in 1995, and became the highest company which took male workers in 2010.
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per cent
Conversely
, Apple was
the highest percentage about 15 Verb problem
had
percent
in 1980 Change the spelling
per cent
then
Replace the word
than
at the end
of whole
period stood Correct article usage
the whole
3rd
place.Change preposition
in 3rd
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