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Band 1

In some countries, most people prefer to rent a house rather than buy their houses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

in many countries,
majority
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the majority
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 of people
chose
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choose
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 to rent a
house
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 rather than
to
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apply
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buy
their
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a
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houses
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house
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.
in
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apply
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this
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esay
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essay
 will discuss
what
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apply
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the benefit and
unbenefit
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benefits
 of renting a home. many people who live in
city
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the city
a city
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 mostly
chose
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choose
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 to rent a
house
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 because
the
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of the
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 price of
home
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the home
a home
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,
base
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based
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 on data from
riset
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research
conduct
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conducted
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 by
prof
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Prof
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.
muhammad
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Muhammad
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 hasan
ali
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Ali
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, a renowned social scientist from
indonesia
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Indonesia
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,
find
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found
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 that 83% of
cityzen
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citizens
citizen
 chose
renting
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to rent
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the
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a
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house
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 rather than buy
a houses
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a house
houses
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.
by
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apply
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renting a
house
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, can give many
advantageus
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advantages
advantageous
such
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 as can live near the workplace and didn't need to have
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a comitment
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comitment
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commitment
 to live there for
long
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a long
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 time is
fery
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very
 beneficial for
young
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the young
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 generation who didn't find
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a comitment
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comitment
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commitment
 to
chose
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choose
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the
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a
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 job.

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grammar
Pay attention to grammar, spelling, and punctuation; for example, 'chose' should be 'choose,' 'esay' should be 'essay,' and 'unbenefit' should be 'disadvantages.'
structure
Include a clear introduction and a concluding paragraph to give your essay a complete structure.
content
Expand on your points with more detailed explanations and examples. For instance, discuss specific reasons why renting might be advantageous or disadvantageous in more depth.
content
You cited a source to support your claim, which adds credibility to your argument.
relevance
You have identified advantages such as proximity to the workplace and flexibility, which are relevant points.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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