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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words. The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph
depict
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depicts
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 the number of
people
 migrating from rural to urban areas from the
year
 2000 to 2025 in three different countries. In the
year
 2000, only a small proportion of
people
 migrated to
urabn
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urban
 settings. Iran
being
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is
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 the lowest with less than 10
million
people
, followed by Indonesia with 20
million
people
 and
Russia
 having a little more than 10
million
people
.
However
 during the following years the trend more individuals started migrating. Indonesia followed a steady
increase
through out
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throughout
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 the years reaching
to
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30
million
 in the
year
 2020 and is expecting no
further
increase
 in migration by 2025.
On the other hand
, Iran showed a slow
increase
upto
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up to
 2005 and has
dispayed
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displayed
 an exponential
increase
 in the following years
predicting
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 to attain a total of almost
a
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100
million
 in the
year
 2025.
Russia
 exhibited a similar trend.
Russia
 was at the top of
list
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the list
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 until 2020,
where
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when
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 both Indonesia and
Russia
 with 80
million
people
 moved from
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 to cities.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, year, million, russia, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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