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I remember a night when my phone was dead,
then
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need
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it
beacuse
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because
I was in a new place that was unfamiliar to me. I
traveled
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to Dubai and without
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a phone
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phone
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phone,
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I lost there.
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, the airport
full
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of tourists and based on my imagination I can't be out at 12 pm o'clock. I was scared and suddenly the
think
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pop
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into my mind
the
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I'm
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in Dubai
not
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Iran. It is ok I am out.
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task achievement
Try to expand your response, providing more details and context about the situation. This will help to fully address the prompt and provide a complete response.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more logically. Start with an introduction, follow with a body containing main points supported by examples, and end with a conclusion to make your essay more coherent.
task achievement
Elaborate on your main points with specific details and examples. This will help to illustrate your experience more vividly and make your essay more engaging.
coherence cohesion
Your narrative has a clear chronological structure, making it easy for the reader to follow the events.
task achievement
You have managed to communicate your feelings effectively, which makes the essay more engaging.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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