One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that authorities are building sufficient satisfying acommodations for their swelling populations whereas still attempting to protect the environment.

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is that authorities are building sufficient satisfying
acommodations
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accommodations
accommodation
for their swelling populations
whereas
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while
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still attempting to protect the environment.
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essay will first discuss how to have enough
housings
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housing
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and
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not harm
surrounding
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habitat
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simultaneously as the main problem.
Secondly
, it will be followed by an analysis of the eco-friendly materials
usage
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in constructing houses as the most effective measure to improve the situation. The most critical concern is that in order to ensure
growing
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quantity of individuals, building ample dwellings has a detrimental effect on the environment.
This
is because clearing forests,grasslands or wetlands are requisite for large-scale
houses
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development. It might result in the loss of natural habitats for wildlife. Implementing the usage of environmentally friendly materials is what should be done to tackle
this
worrying problem.
For instance
, usual roofs can be replaced by green roofs that allow supporting plant growth.
In addition
, solar panels and water turbines could be the main energy sources which is renewable.
As a consequence
,
reduction
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of non-renewable resources consumption,
such
as plastics and fossil fuels might occur. Taking everything into account, one of the main issues with building sufficient passable lodgings for
rising
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the rising
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populace is
pernicious
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the pernicious
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effect on the environment and
this
can be solved through
application
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the application
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of nature-friendly supplies in construction.
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Try to ensure consistency in your language use, such as using 'housing' rather than 'housings.'
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Elaborate more on your examples and ideas to provide a clearer understanding of your points. For instance, you can provide more detail on how green roofs work or give real-life examples of cities successfully using eco-friendly materials.
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structure
The introduction clearly sets up the topic and what the essay will discuss.
solution
You offer a practical solution to the problem by suggesting the usage of environmentally friendly materials.
structure
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