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Writing Samples
Band 6

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first map illustrates how was the science
park
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 in 2008, and the second map shows how the
park
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 has changed
by
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since
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 now.
Overall
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, now
at&nbsp
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at
;
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apply
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 the area
build
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a new buildings
, some
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are being built, some
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 constructions were renamed. In 2008, at the top of the west side was
grassland
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. In the middle of the west side
located
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are
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 business units. By now,
instead
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 of
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a grassland
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grassland
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grassland,
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 built research and development building
.
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has been built.
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 Business units
has
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have
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 not changed.  Near the business units
were
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was
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 a road. Now
cycle
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a cycle
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 path is
build
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built
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 near the road.
In
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At
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 the bottom of the west side
were
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was
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 a big area of woodland. There was
IT
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an IT
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 centre that
renamed
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was renamed
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 to
innovation
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an innovation
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 centre.  In 2008, at the top of the north-east were two buildings: offices and
reception
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a reception
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. Today, the second building changed
the
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its
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 name to
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the unifersity
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unifersity hub
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University Hub
, and
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furthermore
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furthermore,
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the
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a
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 little structure
is
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was
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 built.
At
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To
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 the east
,
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apply
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 was
road
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a road
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. By now,
cycle
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the cycle
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 path and
bus
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the bus
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 stop
added
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have been added
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.
Then
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in
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, in
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 the middle of the east located car
park
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 and cyber
security&nbsp
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security
;
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,
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 with the
grassland
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. By
now
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now,
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 the car
park
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decreased
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has decreased
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 in
the
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apply
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size. The
grassland
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 was removed since the
cyber security's
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cybersecurity's
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 area
increaed
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increased
 in size. In 2008, at the bottom of the south
there
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, there
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were&nbsp
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was
;
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 a railway.
By
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Today
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today
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today,
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 the new station was added. 

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, grassland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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