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Band 4

write a letter to hr for disrespectful behaviour of you towards your office colleagues

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Dear Mam, I
apologiege
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apologise
apologize
 if someone got hurt by my word. It was not done
by
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intensionally
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intentionally
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 as I was in
hurry
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a hurry
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 but it was not disrespectful
at
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. I will take care of it
from
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next time.
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task achievement
You should clearly state the issue and specifically address the disrespectful behavior towards colleagues. Mentioning how you intend to improve your behavior can strengthen the response.
coherence cohesion
You could avoid abrupt transitions between sentences to improve logical structure and enhance the clarity of the letter.
accuracy
Ensure that words are spelled correctly and sentences are grammatically sound. 'Apologiege' should be 'apologize', and 'by intensionally' should be 'intentionally'.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of your letter were respectful and appropriate for the context.
single idea per paragraph
The main idea of apologizing was clear and maintained throughout the paragraph.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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