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Some people think studying in groups is better, while some think self study is better for school students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some individuals think studying in groups is better,
on the other
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hand
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 some people prefer
self studying
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self-studying
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 for school
students
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. I
belive
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believe
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 that studying
individual
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individually
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 can help
students
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improvement
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improve their
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 progress. Studying in groups will improve
student
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students
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cooperate
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cooperative
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behavior
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behaviour
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significantlly
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significantly
, which will help them
in
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 three main reasons.
Firstly
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, nowadays a lot of parents can't deal with
there
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 children, so helping
students
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 by teaching them the cooperation attitude, can help parents to deal with them.
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by
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helping them to cooperate will make them better group
worker
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workers
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, which will help them a lot in future.
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,
self studying
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self-studying
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 will help them to be more competitive. In conclusion , ethier self studying or studying in groups will help
student
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students
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 in different ways, so I think we can improve both behaviors, to make
students
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can
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adapt
in
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to
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 any atmosphere of working .
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