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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph compares the sector contributions to the gross domestic product of India between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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,
firstly
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 the figure for
Agriculture
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 was high proportion and
then
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, passed the time
industry
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 and
services
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 increased than before.
To begin
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, in 1960,
agriculture
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 was almost 65 %, which occupies a large part, but
Industry
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 and
services
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 accounted for 17 % and 18 %, respectively. Afterwards, in 1970,
agriculture
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 decreased to around 55 %, but the other two rose to around 21% and 23 %, in turn. In 1980,
agriculture
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 fell by nearly 45 %.
Industry
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 and
Services
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 are increased approximately 25 % and 28 %, respectively. By 1990 year,
services
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 had risen, the
industry
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 had
also
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 increased compared to before, but
agriculture
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 had doubled over almost 1960 years. In the year 2000,
agriculture
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 dropped by around 15 %, but
services
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 rose the pick of
this
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 year, and
also
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industry
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 rose by nearly 25 %.
In addition
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, the
services
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 have exceeded
agriculture
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 twice as much in recent years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words agriculture, industry, services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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