The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Smmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The layout provides information about the business district in Norbiton
city
.
The first layout shows us their plan Capitalize word
City
of
Norbiton Change preposition
for
city
now and the second one provides information about future plans Capitalize word
City
of
Change preposition
for
development
of the city.
On the first Correct article usage
the development
screen
we can see the river, some roads and factories buildings. Add a comma
screen,
However
, in the future Linking Words
plan
most of the Add a comma
plan,
factories
buildings Change noun form
factory's
factories'
were
reconstructed Wrong verb form
will be
to
housing places. Change preposition
into
Linking Words
Also
the transport interchange has become larger and new branches have been added Add a comma
Also,
such
as a bridge over the river that leads to the new building.
Linking Words
Furthermore
, new facilities were created for people. Linking Words
For example
, shops, Linking Words
playground
, medical Fix the agreement mistake
playgrounds
centre
and Fix the agreement mistake
centres
school
. The central road junction received a new branch. By Fix the agreement mistake
schools
this
Linking Words
branch
you can drive to 3 new houses and shops.
If you drive Add a comma
branch,
on
the East you Change preposition
to
would
see a new playground and school Wrong verb form
will
on
the end of the road.
Change preposition
at
Medical
Add an article
A medical
center
Change the spelling
centre
located
near the main central road on the Add a missing verb
is located
south- east
side.Correct your spelling
south-east
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