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The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map
beneath
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below
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 illustrates how the village named Stokeford has developed during the
last
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 80 years.There have been several changes, the most noticeable being the shops were demolished
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 as farmlands,
whereas
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 primary
school
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schools
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 and retirement
home
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homes
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 had multiple coins in their structure. In 1930
on
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in
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 the
north west
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northwest
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 of the village there
was
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were
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 two more shops than it is today.On the other side of the road was the primary school which stayed in front of the ever existing farmland.
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 the garden, which included
to
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apply
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itself
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apply
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a number of trees,occupied a large area and surrounded the house.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town
  • population
  • transformed
  • bustling
  • road network
  • residential areas
  • industrial sites
  • commercial zones
  • river
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • schools
  • hospitals
  • shopping centers
  • educational facilities
  • healthcare facilities
  • urbanization
  • development
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