Nowadays group of people believe that newspapre i the best way to get news,However, other people think social media is better. This essay discuss both of this veaws and explain why I think media is better than newspaper,

There is no denying
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thinking
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reading
newspapers
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are that
media
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is better.
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advantages of both views and
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I will give my own opinion.    On the one
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reading
newspapers
are able to have
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of pros if you can use it
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or environmental dilemmas which are tackled by people  who
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to
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the government. So family
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have been published
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the
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because
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it can be helpful to others to address their own almost similar
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that
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issues.
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been published in order to attract each human to solve problems which
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bond
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to the environment.
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of things
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manage to help each person
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live more
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.   
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social networking
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and
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multiple
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benefits.
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we live in an age when many of us
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really love communicating with
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and
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social
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can help us to socialize.
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this
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was published something people
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to give comments
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everything and with
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they can socialise with each other. The biggest pros of utilizing social
media
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you are able to seek everything
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you want to watch
for instance
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you can follow some canals in order to learn something.   In
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this
essay was written in order to discuss either opinion which
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some people believe that
newspapers
are the greatest method of reading news
while
other's
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opine  that social
media
is better.
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I can say that if you want to read some news, I wholeheartedly recommend
to read
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it by social networking because it is able to give you more details.
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task achievement
One area for improvement is to directly address each point more clearly and provide more concrete examples. For instance, specific examples showing how newspapers help individuals address family or environmental issues could strengthen the argument.
language
Some sentences are structured awkwardly or contain minor grammatical errors. Paying closer attention to sentence structure and grammar would elevate the essay's clarity and readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas within each paragraph flow logically from one to the next. Topic sentences were occasionally weak, potentially disrupting the flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and provides balanced viewpoints on both newspapers and social media.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and adequately frame the discussion, outlining the essay’s purpose and summarizing the viewpoints.
logical structure
There is a clear attempt to organize the essay into distinct paragraphs, each addressing different aspects of the topic.

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