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task achievement
One area for improvement is to directly address each point more clearly and provide more concrete examples. For instance, specific examples showing how newspapers help individuals address family or environmental issues could strengthen the argument.
language
Some sentences are structured awkwardly or contain minor grammatical errors. Paying closer attention to sentence structure and grammar would elevate the essay's clarity and readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and that ideas within each paragraph flow logically from one to the next. Topic sentences were occasionally weak, potentially disrupting the flow of ideas.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the topic and provides balanced viewpoints on both newspapers and social media.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and adequately frame the discussion, outlining the essay’s purpose and summarizing the viewpoints.
logical structure
There is a clear attempt to organize the essay into distinct paragraphs, each addressing different aspects of the topic.
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