You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in various parts of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show current rates of secondary and higher education among people in

various parts of the world.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
the two presented bar charts compare the current proportion of adult and
school aged
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school-aged
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population
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populations
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in different parts of the world( Europe, SSA, Latin
Amercia
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America
and East Asia)
f or
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for
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males and females.
overall
, the percentage of
school-aged
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the school-aged
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population is almost more than
adult
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adults
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for both males and females except
the
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male category in SSA.
while
in Europe the percentage of people who are
in
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school-aged in both men and women sections are over twice as high as
adult
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adults
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.
According to
the first figure, in East
Asia
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Asia,
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the number of men is more than women ( more than 45% and less than 45%, respectively).
in contrast
, in three other
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area
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area,
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the numbers of women are more than men. and
also
the SSA stands in the fourth(
last
) place with almost 10% and 20% for
male
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males
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and
female
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females
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, respectively).
In addition
to
second
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the second
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chart the number of
female
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females
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in
europe
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Europe
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is more than
male
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males
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.
whereas
, for three other
region
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regions
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the number of
male
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males
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is more than
female
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females
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.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trends
  • disparities
  • secondary education
  • higher education
  • rates
  • regions
  • significant
  • analysis
  • comparisons
  • economic conditions
  • social conditions
  • political conditions
  • highlighting
  • notable gap
  • observed
  • surprising findings
  • affirming
  • overview
  • illustrate
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