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The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people’s expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a European survey into young people’s expectations for change in five different areas of life in the next 20 years. They were asked if they thought things would improve or get worse. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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 chart views the various results that were conducted by a European survey into the expectations for the change in five different areas of young
people
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life
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lives
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 in the next 20 years.
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, approximately 54 per
cent
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 of young
people
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 have a strong belief that communication between
people
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 will change.
On the other hand
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, the other 46 per
cent
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 don't see communication between
people
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 changing in the next 20 years.
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, the quality of food is
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 predicted by 49 per
cent
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 of the population to change, unfortunately, 60 per
cent
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 of the population expected that water will get worse and 70 per
cent
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 expect the quality of air in cities to get worse. from the graph, we can conclude that the three major changes that could happen in the next twenty years are the communication between
people
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, the quality of water and the health

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expectations
  • improvements
  • deterioration
  • optimism
  • pessimism
  • proportions
  • survey
  • life areas
  • career opportunities
  • education
  • environment
  • health
  • technology
  • implications
  • perceptions
  • attitudes
  • future changes
  • generational perspectives
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