The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compparisons where relevant.
This
Linking Words
graph
illustrates the percentage of Use synonyms
men
and Use synonyms
women
between the Use synonyms
ages
60-64 and their Use synonyms
employment
status in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
Use synonyms
To begin
, in Linking Words
men
, there is a difference in Use synonyms
employment
between the years 1970 and 2000, and the Use synonyms
graph
shows that in general Use synonyms
men
of Use synonyms
ages
60-64 were more employed in 1970 as there is a higher percentage of Use synonyms
employment
during that time across all four countries.
in the years 1970 and 2000 Use synonyms
men
in Japan had the highest Use synonyms
employment
rate compared to all the other four countries.
Use synonyms
Moreover
, in the Linking Words
women
's Use synonyms
graph
, we can see a wide difference in the Use synonyms
employment
rate compared to the Use synonyms
men
's Use synonyms
employment
rate.
In the same way, it is seen from the Use synonyms
graph
that Use synonyms
women
in Japan are the most employed during the Use synonyms
ages
of 60-64.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, Belgium is considered to have the lowest number of Linking Words
women
in Use synonyms
employment
between those Use synonyms
ages
and across the two years.
Use synonyms
to conclude
, there is a big difference between Linking Words
men
and Use synonyms
women
in Use synonyms
employment
of Use synonyms
ages
60-64, with Use synonyms
men
having a higher chance of being employedUse synonyms
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, men, women, ages, employment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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