The graphs below show the percentage of men and women aged 60-64 who were employed in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compparisons where relevant.
This
graph
illustrates the percentage of men
and women
between the ages
60-64 and their employment
status in four countries in 1970 and 2000.
To begin
, in men
, there is a difference in employment
between the years 1970 and 2000, and the graph
shows that in general men
of ages
60-64 were more employed in 1970 as there is a higher percentage of employment
during that time across all four countries.
in the years 1970 and 2000 men
in Japan had the highest employment
rate compared to all the other four countries.
Moreover
, in the women
's graph
, we can see a wide difference in the employment
rate compared to the men
's employment
rate.
In the same way, it is seen from the graph
that women
in Japan are the most employed during the ages
of 60-64.
On the other hand
, Belgium is considered to have the lowest number of women
in employment
between those ages
and across the two years.
to conclude
, there is a big difference between men
and women
in employment
of ages
60-64, with men
having a higher chance of being employedSubmitted by Rneem on
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, men, women, ages, employment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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