The Chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
that
figure of Correct determiner usage
the
toruist
to a local cinema based on age in 2000.Correct your spelling
tourist
tourists
Overall
, it is clear that
,
theRemove the comma
apply
ages55
And older Correct your spelling
ages 55
was
the highest figure Correct subject-verb agreement
were
whereas
, Ages
31 -45 was the lowest number.
To begin with, the percentage of ages
55 and older was 51 percent
in 2000 .
Correct your spelling
On
on the contrary
, the proportion of ages
31_45 was 5 percent
.In addition
to that ,the rate of ages
10_15 was 21 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
While
,
the percentage of Remove the comma
apply
Correct pronoun usage
those age
age
21-30 was 8 per cent .Wrong verb form
aged
Moreover
,8 percent
was in ages
21 _30 .Submitted by um.maktoum2014 on
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