The Chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Chart shows the number of visitors to a local cinema according to age in 2000.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates
that
Correct determiner usage
the
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figure of
toruist
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tourist
tourists
to a local cinema based on age in 2000.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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apply
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the
ages55
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ages 55
And older
was
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were
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the highest figure
whereas
,
Ages
31 -45 was the lowest number. To begin with, the percentage of
ages
55 and older was 51
percent
in 2000
.
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On
on the contrary
, the proportion of
ages
31_45 was 5
percent
.
In addition
to that ,the rate of
ages
10_15 was 21
percent
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per cent
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.
While
,
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apply
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the percentage of
Correct pronoun usage
those age
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age
Wrong verb form
aged
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21-30 was 8 per cent .
Moreover
,8
percent
was in
ages
21 _30 .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ages, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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