You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: *explain which course you are interested in *say what you know about the university *explain why you should receive the scholarship
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to get a chance to get a scholarship by applying to program
that you have.
I want to participate Correct article usage
the program
your
extra course, which is Change preposition
in your
English
language because Change the article
the English
of
I am fascinated Change preposition
apply
this
language. When I went to the city, I Change preposition
by this
have seen
your advertisement which Wrong verb form
saw
is
in the broadsheet and Wrong verb form
was
then
I asked my close friend because he is understanding. Therefore
, I chose your scholarship.
Furthermore
, your university
is well-known
place in your country Add an article
a well-known
therefore
I know your university
. Exactly I find
out about your place where you always give Wrong verb form
found
lesson
Fix the agreement mistake
lessons
in
your Change preposition
at
university
. I am aware of university
. Add an article
the university
For instance
, there are plenty of convenience
classrooms, Replace the word
convenient
sport club
with vital equipment and Fix the agreement mistake
sports clubs
beauty
environment.
Replace the word
a beautiful
Firstly
, I desire to obtain grant
in order to I am going to live abroad state. Add an article
a grant
Secondly
there is no huge impact on the budget of my family. Add a comma
Secondly,
Finally
my parents proud
of me.
Thank you for considering my inquiry. I look forward to your response.
Yours faithfully,
Umarqulov OzodbekAdd a missing verb
were proud
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coherence cohesion
The logical flow of ideas needs enhancement. Try to use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitious phrases—especially when describing what you know about the university and why you chose it, like 'I know your university' and 'I am aware of university'.
task achievement
Pay attention to maintaining a neutral and polite tone throughout. Phrases like 'fascinated by' are great, but ensure they fit the context accurately.
coherence cohesion
The closing of the letter is appropriately polite and formal.
task achievement
You covered all aspects of the task, explaining the course of interest, what you know about the university, and why you should receive a scholarship.
task achievement
Sentences are mostly clear, making it easy to understand your points.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite