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You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaints ---------------------------------------------------------------

#hotel #conference #company #room #complaints
Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with
your
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 hotel that I stayed
recently
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. I often try to get luxurious rooms in hotels when I am abroad. Because I always try to know which hotel has
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quick
customer
service
 with good quality. But
this
 time it is not
that much
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 good as I thought. Because my first problem was leaking water in the bathroom and kitchen. Whenever I use the water in the bath or in the kitchen disgusting smell comes from the tubes and after that water comes out from the place where screws were hardened. To make matters worse
customer
service
 was so slow. When I called
to
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the
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customer
service
 they put me on hold or it took them years to answer the phone.If you ever wanted to avoid
this
 type of
problems
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 you should hire more employees for
customer
service
. My best advice for other compliment is
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 the tubes or at least repair them. I expect to receive an explanation from you. Yours faithfully. Safarov Abrorjon
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Grammar and Sentence Construction
Revise the grammar and sentence construction to improve the overall readability. For example, 'When I called to the customer service they put me on hold or it took them years to answer the phone' can be improved as 'When I called customer service, they often put me on hold, and it took them a very long time to answer the phone.'
Elaboration of Problems and Solutions
Develop the problems and suggested solutions more comprehensively. Elaborate on each issue with more specific details and provide a stronger conclusion. This will give more clarity and depth to your essay.
Specific Examples
The essay effectively outlines specific issues encountered during the stay, such as leaking water and slow customer service, giving concrete examples that support the complaints.
Proposed Solutions
You made strong recommendations for improvements, such as hiring more customer service staff and repairing or changing the tubes, which shows a clear understanding of how to resolve the issues faced.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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