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You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company *Introduce yourself *Explain the situation *Say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Sir, I am writing in order to complain about employees of your
company
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 I have been a regular customer of your
company
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 for many years.I always pick up items which
is
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 technical,
for instance
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, microphone, computer and so on.
However
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,I purchased
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camera
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a camera
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 for my brother as a gift. When I went to the home,I saw that it had some
problems
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.
Firstly
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, there was a problem with the
camera
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's linza.It was broken.
Secondly
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,
cabel
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the cabel
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 of changing was not working well.
For
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this
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 reason,I returned the
camera
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 to the
company
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 and told all the
problems
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 your
company
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 representative,
then
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 I left the
camera
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 to the workers for fixing
problems
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 a week ago.But,today I went to the
company
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 in the morning
for bringing
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to bring
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 my
camera
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,
it
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and it
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 has still not been repaired.
Thats
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That's
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 why I needed to wait a long time
while
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 fixing
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problems
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the problems
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of
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with
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camera
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the camera
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. I would be grateful if you take action
your
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on your
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employeers
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employees
employers
 responsibilities .I think, if you punish the member of staff,they will be more responsible for their job Yours faithfully, Madina Sattorova

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task achievement
Provide a clear and concise introduction about yourself and why you are writing the letter. It helps set the context for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Ensure there are clear topic sentences for each paragraph to maintain a strong logical structure throughout the letter.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone, especially when discussing dissatisfaction and requesting action from the company.
single idea per paragraph
Good use of paragraphing with each paragraph addressing a different aspect of the issue.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear greeting and closing, making it easy to follow.
complete response
The letter addresses all necessary points: introduction, explanation of the situation, and requested action.
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