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Some people today believe that the world's increase in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis.Other people believe that world population is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world's economy and society. Discuss both views and give your option.

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population growth always
was
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 an important topic to talk about . as the population
growth
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 more , we will need more food and facilities to live . for a lot of people having several kids is a must , and their goal , but
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 think
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better lives
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 more important than more lives , so in my
view
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 if we
dont
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don't
 control the population on earth there will be hunger strikes and
lack
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 of jobs and low quality of life
on the other
hand
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 if people can provide
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 happiness and needs it
good
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 to have more children .
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Develop a clear and concise thesis statement in the introduction to outline your main points.
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Provide more detailed supporting points and specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and logically flows from one to the next.
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Include a conclusion that effectively summarizes your main points and restates your thesis.
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The essay raises valid concerns about overpopulation and its potential consequences.
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You have made an effort to present both viewpoints in the discussion.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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