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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pictures compare the
different
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 between
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Porth Harbour in 2000 and today.
Overall
, we can see the
currently
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 design involves making a number of changes to the western and southeast of the Porth Harbour. There is no development of
car
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a car
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 park. The most noticeable change from
the
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today
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 designated Porth Harbour is that there
are
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 one more
showers
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shower
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 and
toilet
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 near
to
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the
car
 park which
was
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 without bathrooms.
Besides
, the location of fishing boats and marina (private yachts) is swapped place, and they build
a
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new cafes and shops area which nearby the lifeboat.
Moreover
, the place
for
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castle which
was
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 not use for a long time rebuilt
to
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 a hotel with a new road that connect to it,
it leads
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 the public beach become to
private
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a private
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 beach for the hotel.
While
 the location of
two
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the two
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car
 parking
area
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are didn’t
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 changed, the road of the
car
 park to the south
connect
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 to the main road.
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introduction conclusion present
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logical structure
Improve the logical flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs. Ensure there is a clear and smooth transition from one point to another.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure that all points are fully explained and include more details where necessary to provide a comprehensive response.
supported main points
The essay identifies and compares key changes in the harbour layout effectively.
supported main points
There is a good use of comparative language to highlight differences between the years.
relevant specific examples
Examples were used appropriately to illustrate the changes discussed.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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