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You recently attended a metting at a hotel. When you retured home, you found you had left some important papenrs at the hotel. ●say where you think you left the papers ●explain why they are so important ●tell the manager what you want him/her to do

#hotel #home #papenrs #●say #papers #●explain #●tell #manager
Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or
madam
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Madam
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, I am
writimg
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writing
 to solve some of my problems. I recently
attend
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attended
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 a meeting, when I came home I found that I
forget
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had forgotten
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 some important papers in your hotel. I recently
attend
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attended
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 a
metting
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meeting
 with important
business
 personnel at your hotel. I think I made a
terible
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terrible
 mistake. I forgot my important
business
 papers. And I left the papers on the desks in room thirteen. The reason I forgot them was because I went to the bathroom. For the reason that I felt
umcomfortable
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uncomfortable
comfortable
. So
that is
my
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apply
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one of
important
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the important
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thing
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things
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 in my life. It was the ticket that
helps
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helped
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 me to start my new own
business
and
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apply
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I really wanted to start my own
business
 and now I almost did it. I have already
get
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got
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 all
imformation
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information
 about how to make my million
dollar
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dollars
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. There was
a
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an
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imformation
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information
 about
this
 in that paper. I would appreciate it if you
coul
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could
 take it somewhere until I can go and get it. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully Raxmon Kamolov
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general
Pay attention to spelling and grammatical accuracy. Correct mistakes such as 'writimg' to 'writing', and 'metting' to 'meeting'. Also, 'terible' should be 'terrible'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that you properly structure the introduction and conclusion. Your introduction could be more precise, and the conclusion should neatly wrap up the main points of your letter.
task achievement
Clarify the importance of the papers with specific, detailed examples. Explain the contents of the papers more thoroughly and their importance to your business venture.
task achievement
The letter identifies the location where the papers were left clearly ('on the desks in room thirteen').
general
The tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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