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The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrıcan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the average temperatures of three Afrıcan cities through the year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied line graph illustrates the average monthly temperatures for three African cities throughout the
year
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Cairo
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, Mombasa, and Cape Town. At first glance,
Cairo
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 experienced a significant increase in
temperature
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,
while
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 Cape Town witnessed a dramatic decrease. Mombasa indicated stable and hot temperatures throughout the
year
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. In January, the
temperature
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 in
Cairo
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 was 55
°F
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, and there was
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steady growth, peaking at approximately 85
°F
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. After August,
Cairo
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 indicated a sharp drop of around 30
°F
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 until December. At the beginning of the
year
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, Cape Town experienced warm weather, with temperatures around 70
°F
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.
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, by the middle of the
year
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, the
temperature
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 gradually fell, reaching 55
°F
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. After July, the
temperature
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 rose again, returning to about 70
°F
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 in December. Mombasa exhibited an almost steady
temperature
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 throughout the
year
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. In July, there was a slight drop in its warmth.
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, in the second half of the
year
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, it went up to 80
°F
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, cairo, temperature, °f with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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