Some people argue that it is the government's responsibility to transport children to school while others belive that parents should do that. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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are
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is
baised
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biased
based
opinion
on transportation Use synonyms
service
for Use synonyms
children
to school where some people states that government is Use synonyms
responsibe
for transit. Correct your spelling
responsible
However
, on Linking Words
other
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the other
hand
some people believe that Add a comma
hand,
parents
should personally drop off and pick up their Use synonyms
children
. prior Use synonyms
giving
my Change preposition
to giving
opinion
both the views would be discussed Use synonyms
further
.
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to
the first Change preposition
of
view point
, Correct your spelling
viewpoint
government
providing transit bus Correct article usage
the government
service
for Use synonyms
childrens
is valid because the lagislation plays Correct your spelling
children
major
role in Add an article
a major
education
system for students. Add an article
the education
For instance
, in many European countries Linking Words
there
are flexible bus Correct pronoun usage
apply
service
is provided, which Use synonyms
pick
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picks
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up childrens
childrens
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children
children's
as well as
teachers from their Linking Words
home
. Fix the agreement mistake
homes
This
facility is Linking Words
convinent
and time as Correct your spelling
convenient
wellas
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well as
money saving
. Add a hyphen
money-saving
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, there would be less traffic Linking Words
in
school premises which Change preposition
on
leads
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would lead
less
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fewer
easy
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and easy
passings
for everyone.
On Fix the agreement mistake
passing
other
hand, In Correct article usage
the other
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opinion
of Add an article
the opinion
crowd
supporting Add an article
the crowd
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the later
later
view, Correct your spelling
latter
Parents
should do pickup and drop off Use synonyms
service
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of
their Change preposition
for
childrens
for sofety and betterment Correct your spelling
children
purpose
. Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
Parents
can track their daily academic Use synonyms
pdates
from their mentors. Correct your spelling
dates
This
would eventually help Linking Words
parents
to guide Use synonyms
child
in Add an article
the child
a child
correct
direction. Add an article
the correct
Moreover
, Linking Words
friend
circle plays Correct article usage
the friend
major
role Add an article
a major
behind
the success of Change preposition
in
children
. Use synonyms
Parents
can meet their Use synonyms
friends
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friend's
friends'
parents
which Use synonyms
create
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creates
strong
bond between their Add an article
a strong
children
.
In conclusion, after discussing both Use synonyms
the
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apply
Use synonyms
opinion
I believe, Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
government
should provide transportation Add an article
the government
Use synonyms
service
for students as Fix the agreement mistake
services
their
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there
convinient
for distance living Students Correct your spelling
convenient
as well as
there would be less traffic in Linking Words
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the premices
premices
which would help Correct your spelling
premises
student
to walk freely Fix the agreement mistake
students
in
Campus. Change preposition
on
Where as
if every Correct your spelling
Whereas
Use synonyms
parents
starts visiting school for the Change to a singular noun
parent
children
. There would be lots Use synonyms
materialistic
loss in each Change preposition
of materialistic
transpartation
.Correct your spelling
transportation
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