You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion. You should write at least 250 words.

In some regions, international sport is achieved by providing top
athletes
with high-level training
centers
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,
instead
of equipping public spaces with an affordable inventory. I, personally, think that
this
practice has a negative impact in terms of restriction potential
athletes
, who are not wealthy enough for expensive
trainings
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. For others, it is believed that
such
policy
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could be a positive development. If sport becomes a privilege one day, that would be a huge problem, because many factors to be an excellent sportsman are heritable. How would you know that you are good at climbing when you never actually try
this
?
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, a lot of worldwide famous football players were found in the streets, they did not attend any special training
centers
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, but still managed to improve enough to be recruited. Despite
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some people are sure, that the government should focus on already successful
athletes
and give them opportunities to train at specialised facilities. Their point of view is that it is easier to achieve better results if you could train under
the
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professional and those places should be limited with the amount of trainees that are visiting them.
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, not only were specialised training
centers
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the reason why Russia has been keeping leading scores at Olimpic's
at
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figure skating for the
last
decades but
also
a strict selection among thousands of talented kids
was
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. All in all both views have their points. The government can focus on building specialised facilities to train top
athletes
, but I think a better option is providing
sport
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equipment in public spaces.
This
choice gives more people
freedom
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the freedom
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to become international sportsmen.
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While the essay presents a reasonable argument for both sides, it could benefit from further elaboration and depth in discussing these points. Introduce more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance clarity and engagement.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph fully develops its main point. Strengthen the logical connections between ideas, and use more transitional phrases to improve flow.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which frame the discussion effectively.
task response
Both viewpoints are discussed, demonstrating an understanding of the task requirements.

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