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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given table illustrates the number of temporary migrant
workers
 between 2003 and 2006, and these
workers
 per 1,000 people in the
last
 year -2006.
Overall
, there are four countries including New
Zealand
, the United Kingdom,
Australia
, and the United States. The
workers
 in the USA reached the peak in
this
 table. In another category, New
Zealand
 got the highest point in
'per
Correct article usage
the 'per
show examples
 1,000 people 2006' column. In the first year of the
servey
Correct your spelling
survey
, the United States of America was the place which had the most
emplyers
Correct your spelling
employees
 approximately 577,000.
Australia
 and the UK reached respectively 152,000 and 137,000. New
Zealand
 was the lowest around 65,000. After three years, the USA
rose
Verb problem
has
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 more than 100,000
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
workers
 and still
get
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has
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 the highest among these countries.
Then
 was the UK,
Australia
 and the latest was New
Zealand
.
Difference
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Differences
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with
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between
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two
Correct article usage
the two
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 columns were mentioned. The 'per 1,000 people 2006' showed that New
Zealand
 got the top, which was 21,1.
Australia
 and the United Kingdom
was
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were
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repectively
Correct your spelling
respectively
 10,7 and 4,4.
By contrast
, the USA got the lowest point around 2,3.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, zealand, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • temporary migrant workers
  • trends
  • absolute numbers
  • per 1,000 people
  • growth rate
  • per capita
  • labor markets
  • economies
  • significant
  • imply
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