The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from

sugar cane.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates the step-by-step stages of producing
sugar
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from
canes
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.
Overall
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, the process is 7 stages, man-made and linear process which begins with growing
sugar
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canes
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in fields and ends with drying and cooling
sugar
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crystals. The initial step is to wait for approximately 12 to 18 months for
canes
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to grow. After they are grown, they are harvested either by manual labour or by a machinery truck, and they are both used to cut
canes
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and remove leaves from the stems. The subsequent step is to place stems in a crusher machine which is used to crush the stems and extract juice from them. Following that, the extracted juice is purified through a limestone filter. After that, it is heated until it evaporates and becomes syrup.
Then
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,
sugar
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crystals are separated from the syrup by using a centrifuge before they are dried and cooled in a big can.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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