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Writing Samples
Band 2

the digram shows the floor plane of public library 20 yeares ago and how it look now

The
digram
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diagram
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 provides information about the public library
befor
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before
for
 20
yeares
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years
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 and how it looks
today
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.
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, some space in the
roomes
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becaume
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becomes
 bigger than
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before
.
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,
changed
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for
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the
chapes
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shapes
 and design of the rooms.
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 of all,
central
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 library 20 years ago
was
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had tables and chairs in the middle. The enquiry desk now became the cafe.Now
today
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 the library
have
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a adult
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an adult fiction book
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fiction
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books
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in addition
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,
self-service
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 machines.In the
behiend
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behind
 the adult
fiction
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books
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, there are lecture
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room
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.
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, replace it
from
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with
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Cds
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CDs
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,videos and
coputer
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computer
 games
to
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in
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the chidren's
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chidren's
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children's
fiction
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books
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room
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,
chidren's
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children's
books
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today
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more
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bigger and add
such
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 as
,
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 storytelling
event
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 and
children'
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fiction
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books
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. All
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the refrence
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refrence
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reference
books
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, now you can find
it
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 between the
children
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fiction
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books
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 and
computer
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the computer
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room
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. The
digram
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diagram
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 shows, the
diffrent
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difference
 between the computer
room
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have include
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includes
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 CDs,
videos
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and videos
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befor
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before
 20
yeares
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years
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 ago,
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,
for
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apply
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today
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became
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only
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the only
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 computer
room
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 and has
specific
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 function to
used
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clearer structure and logical flow. Consider using paragraphs effectively to separate different parts of the comparison.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear introduction and conclusion to frame your essay. This helps in providing a sense of completeness.
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Focus on supporting your main points with specific details and examples from the diagrams. This will strengthen your arguments and make your ideas more comprehensive.
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Try to use varied and accurate vocabulary to describe the differences and changes. This will help in making your writing more engaging and clear.
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Address all aspects of the task. Ensure you cover all significant changes or details in the diagrams to meet the task requirements fully.
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You made a good attempt at describing the changes in the public library over a span of 20 years. This demonstrates your ability to analyze visual data.
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Your essay has a decent amount of detail, reflecting an effort to provide a comprehensive description of the floor plan changes.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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