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The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below illustrates
cinema
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attendance
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 among residents of the United Kingdom, aged 14 to 54, comparing data from the 1990s and the 2000s.
Overall
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, it is evident that
cinema
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attendance
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 was predominantly high among middle-aged individuals, with a noticeable preference for film-going evident over the years.
In particular
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, adults aged 34 and
over represented
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 the majority of
cinema
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-goers in both decades, reflecting a consistent trend of around one-third of their
age
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 group attending cinemas.
Conversely
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, younger demographics, specifically those in their teens and early twenties, exhibited lower
attendance
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 rates, with figures fluctuating between 15% and 25%. In the 1990s, the data
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 that
cinema
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attendance
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 was significantly higher among those aged 34 and above, as
this
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age
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 group consistently comprised about one-third of the total
cinema
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-goers.
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 trend can be attributed to a preference for leisurely activities in calm environments,
such
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 as watching films in theatres. By the 2000s, there was a noticeable increase in
cinema
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attendance
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 across all
age
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 groups after a brief decline.
Attendance
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 rates for individuals aged 34 and over rose to approximately 50%, reflecting a broad resurgence in interest.
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, younger audiences
also
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 showed a moderate increase in
attendance
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, though their figures remained lower compared to the middle-aged demographic. On closer examination,
while
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cinema
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attendance
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 in the UK saw a general increase in the 2000s, the trend remained strongest among the middle-aged population, with younger
age
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 groups showing a gradual improvement in participation.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, attendance, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • anomaly
  • trend
  • pattern
  • attendance
  • cinema-goers
  • audience
  • peak
  • decline
  • increment
  • fluctuation
  • baseline
  • societal changes
  • technological advancements
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • home entertainment
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