Human activity has had a negative effect on plants and animal all over the world. Some people think that it too late to do something about it. other think that there is still time to take effective action. discuss both sides and give your opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevent examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Modern civilisation has been
influence
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influencing
influenced
damonstrably
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demonstrably
demonstrable
negative
on Change the word
negatively
habitats
of a number of Correct article usage
the habitats
animals
and plant
, in Fix the agreement mistake
plants
resent
decades. It is undeniable that some damages are in giant size, albeit I believe there are some measures to mitigate Correct your spelling
recent
this
current danger situation, will
now be discussed.
Some people claim that today's industry has Correct pronoun usage
which will
affected
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been affected
such
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to such
extent
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an extent
as
we do not come back Correct word choice
that
prior
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to prior
normal
levels across the world. Change preposition
to normal
For instance
, oil
production is one of the most dangerous industry
which Change to a plural noun
industries
is consisted
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consists
a
range of stages, processes and byproducts Change preposition
of a
endanger
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that endanger
lives
of numerous plants and Correct article usage
the lives
animal
in both oceans and ground. Fix the agreement mistake
animals
In addition
, accidents happen, almost every year, on
Change preposition
in
oil
transition that follow pollution with Correct article usage
the oil
oil
and to
destroy Fix the infinitive
apply
the
natural habitats. Correct article usage
apply
As a result
, all creatures are killed by physical actions or there is no adequate oxygen for breath or drastic change in the level of pH in the environment. A deforestation
is another big Remove the article
Deforestation
threating
that causes Correct your spelling
threat
a
peril for Correct article usage
apply
living
both Verb problem
apply
of
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apply
plant
and Fix the agreement mistake
plants
animals
. The direct effect of this
process is cutting down years-old trees in a big
amount and a secondhand influence is Correct word choice
large
destroing
the native Correct your spelling
destroying
inhabitats
of Correct your spelling
inhabitants
habitats
animals
which including
food and living areas.
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include
Nevertheless
, there are
a lot Change the verb form
is
negative
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of negative
effect
on nature, it is possible to change Fix the agreement mistake
effects
current
situation to normal. First of all Correct article usage
the current
it
should be promoted Correct pronoun usage
apply
reneable
energy sources in every field Correct your spelling
renewable
industry
and transport by government. Change preposition
of industry
This
measure enable
to Change the verb form
enables
reduce
Replace the word
reduction
oil
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of oil
require
over Wrong verb form
required
all
the world Correct determiner usage
apply
therefore
, will decrease Add the comma(s)
, therefore
carbon
footprint Correct article usage
the carbon
also
. For preventing
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To prevent
deforestration
it is necessary Correct your spelling
deforestation
that
to impose very high taxes on Correct word choice
apply
wood
products trade and Correct article usage
the wood
heavily
fines on Change the word
heavy
illigal
cutting down trees. Correct your spelling
illegal
By
these ways, we can protect Change preposition
In
natural
habitats of many Correct article usage
the natural
animals
and plants though, ecology endanger
riskily.
In Wrong verb form
is endangered
conclution
, it is Correct your spelling
conclusion
the
fact that Correct article usage
a
environment
pollution Replace the word
environmental
reach
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has reached
to
a Change preposition
apply
such
high level as
numerous Change preposition
that
animal
and plants are on the verge of extinction, albeit from my view point we can control Fix the agreement mistake
animals
on
these mutlifactural problems with the mentioned measures above.Change preposition
apply
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task achievement
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, but try to elaborate more on the arguments to provide a fuller response. For instance, adding more specific examples and explanations for each point will strengthen your argument.
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Ensure that your essay has a logical progression of ideas. Try to clearly connect each point to the next using cohesive devices (e.g., however, therefore, additionally). It's also helpful to break down more complex ideas into simpler parts.
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coherence cohesion
Pay more attention to topic sentences and make sure they clearly state the main idea of each paragraph. This will make your arguments clearer and easier to follow.
introduction conclusion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which is good for framing your overall argument.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples such as oil production and deforestation to support your arguments, which is a strong point in your essay.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.
Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.
When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.
Linking words for giving examples:
- for example
- for instance
- to illustrate this
- to give a clear example
- such as
- namely
- to illustrate
- take, for example
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