You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
Dear Sir or Madam,
It is really great to receive a letter from you.
Actually
I'm so glad to help you. I want to suggest you, Add a comma
Actually,
to
gain some work experience before working Fix the infinitive
apply
at
somewhere. Right now I explain why I suggest Change preposition
apply
this
.
The first thing I would like to draw your attention is
if you improve your knowledge you can check your goals and you can achieve whatever you want. But I know you don't want to stay Change preposition
to is
this
third world at old fashioned college. Because you are Change preposition
in this
extrovert
people and you don't want to Correct article usage
an extrovert
doing
a college exercise. Change the verb
do
Nevertheless
I think you have to study for yourself, Add a comma
Nevertheless,
after
this
you can find your dreamy
job Replace the word
dream
from
the other country which you want.
Change preposition
in
Furthermore
what I said above is my own opinion, I think you should go to the way that you want. 107 is sad you would like to communicate with pupils and I know you want to learn new culture. That's why you choose a job.
Add a comma
Furthermore,
Secondly
I think you can be a translator. Because with that Add a comma
Secondly,
job
you can go to the other country and you can Add a comma
job,
also
learn new culture like you want. That's why I found this
profession suitable for you.
I hope my suggest
can help to you Replace the word
suggestion
for deciding
.
Warm wishes,
JasminaWrong verb form
decide
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coherence cohesion
To enhance clarity, consider breaking down complex sentences into shorter, more comprehensible ones.
task achievement
Make sure to address each bullet point clearly and separately. This helps maintain the structure of your writing.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and provide detailed reasons.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, creating a friendly tone.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a distinct point, which aids in the reader’s understanding.
The Greeting
Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.
Always start an informal letter in the ways:
- Dear + name
- Hi / Hello + name
‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.
For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:
- Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
- Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.