You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: •say why he/she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Sir or Madam, It is really great to receive a letter from you.
Actually
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I'm so glad to help you. I want to suggest you,
to
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apply
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gain some work experience before working
at
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somewhere. Right now I explain why I suggest
this
. The first thing I would like to draw your attention
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if you improve your knowledge you can check your goals and you can achieve whatever you want. But I know you don't want to stay
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third world at old fashioned college. Because you are
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people and you don't want to
doing
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a college exercise.
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I think you have to study for yourself,
after
this
you can find your
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job
from
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in
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the other country which you want.
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what I said above is my own opinion, I think you should go to the way that you want. 107 is sad you would like to communicate with pupils and I know you want to learn new culture. That's why you choose a job.
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I think you can be a translator. Because with that
job
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you can go to the other country and you can
also
learn new culture like you want. That's why I found
this
profession suitable for you. I hope my
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can help to you
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. Warm wishes, Jasmina
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Use more specific examples to strengthen your arguments and provide detailed reasons.
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The greeting and closing are appropriately used, creating a friendly tone.
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Each paragraph addresses a distinct point, which aids in the reader’s understanding.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical nature
  • real-world experience
  • practical experience
  • professional network
  • financial independence
  • dynamic
  • on-the-job learning
  • creative industries
  • customer service
  • sectors
  • suitable
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