Some people think public library is necessary, however, others believe that the public library is useless. What is your opinion and provide with some relevant examples.

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no
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denying the
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that
people
are not on the same mind when it comes to
library
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the library
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.
while
it is commonly held belief that local
library
is must there is
also
an argument that local
libabry
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library
is not significant. In
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of view and express my opinion . On
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hand
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local
library
is
importnatn
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important
for reading
in other words
reading helps
expanding
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knowledge and ideas it helps
people
create better and plan better
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to
this
reading or having local
library
help
people
finding
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things to do in their free
times
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it
help
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with researching it can rise the average knowledge
for instance
if you are free and you got nothing to do the first thing comes to your mind is to play videos games but if you have a near local
library
you may go there if course having a
library
will
impove
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improve
the academic growth .
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contrast
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others think that having a local
library
is a waste of time
there
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and there
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are no real benefits from the
library
it is
also
possible to say that local libraries cost a lot
however
it may be a problem for the government
moreover
no one goes to the
library
these because everyone has a device and it is easier to look for any information and more convenient and you will save time and effort by doing that . In
conclusion
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despite
people
having different views I believe that libraries are very critical for any society to grow and for
academics
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growth.
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