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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effectiv

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In the contemporary world, it is an irrefutable fact that
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 there is an exponential surge in traffic and
environment
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 contamination. Some people
argued
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 that
this
 problem can be resolved by
rising
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 the oil prices.
However
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 I
am not agree
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 with the above statement.In my opinion, there are some other measures which can be utilized like strict policies and awareness.
This
 essay will analyze points
along with
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 better demonstration of arguments. To commence with, the main issue behind why the increase in the oil cost
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 not effective is because it can be the reason
of
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 the high unemployment rates in the developing nations.
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, numerous people
are depending
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 on the transportation
sectors
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 for their survival but the
surden
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sudden
 change in prices can directly
impacts
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 their basic income.
For example
, as per research of the
Indians
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 Times around 38% workforce of India
working
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 in transportation
corporation
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corporations
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, so shut
down
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 of any company
due to
 their high expenses of petrol or diesel can be the reason
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 many job
loses
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.
However
, there are manifold
option
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 which can
be consider
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 for better
result
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results
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 like government policies. To explain,
instead
 of price changes to mitigate the concern of traffic cognition and
adultration
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adulteration
, high authorities can make better policies which
limits
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 the use of personal
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and automobiles per family.
For instance
, the Delhi official made one rule in 2021,
according to
 which they
assign
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 2
vehicular
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vehicles
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 to one family, and
as a result
, there was
8
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% decline of personal transports on the road, which automatically
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 accidents and pollutant factors.
To conclude
,
although
main
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causes
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behind
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 traffic and
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pollutant
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pollutants
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 is the
usage
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 of more petrol
vehicle
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vehicles
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but
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in my point of view,
this
 affair cannot be resolved through price change,
implementation
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 of
proposed
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 solution like strong
regulation
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regulations
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 can be more useful to alleviate
above
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 complication.
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grammar
Ensure that all sentences are grammatically correct to make your ideas clearer and easier to understand. For example, avoid grammatical errors like "there is" instead of "there are" when referring to plural nouns.
thesis statement
Provide a clearer thesis statement and make sure each paragraph directly supports this main argument.
supporting points
Elaborate more on each supporting point to develop a cohesive argument. Provide additional examples and detailed explanations to fully clarify your ideas.
task response
You addressed the question and gave your opinion clearly, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your key points, which helps to reinforce your arguments.
task response
The use of relevant examples, such as the Delhi example, helps to illustrate your points more clearly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • petrol prices
  • public transportation
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • disproportionately affect
  • inequality
  • emissions standards
  • cycling and walking
  • safe bike lanes
  • pedestrian zones
  • smart city technologies
  • traffic flow management
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