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The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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the two maps illustrate that the village of Reymouth has changed noticeably from 1995
untill
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until
 now.
overall
, the
numbers
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number
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 of
home
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homes
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 in
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the residental
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residental
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residential
 area has
a
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apply
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significant growth now and
also
 the farmland and forest which
was
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were
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 located in the NorthEast of the layout,
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were replaced
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 by golf and tennis, respectively.
According to
 the figures, the residential area which was in the NorthWest of the layout, just
expand
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expanded
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 and more
home
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homes
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was
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have been
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 built since 1995. There was a fishing port in the sea which
it
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apply
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was demolished and we can not see
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it in
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in
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on
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 the map now, and
also
 the fish market
in
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at
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 the top of the sea
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was replaced
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 by apartments . The cafe and hotel are in their
last
 place(without any change).
in
addition
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addition,
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 the car park was built next to the hotel.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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