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The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart shows the divorce rates in two European countries from 2011 to 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph depicts the information about the proportion of
divorce
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swedish
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Swedish
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 and
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finland
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Finland
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 people between the
year
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years
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 2011 to 2015.
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,it is noticeable that in
first
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 year , both showed
upward
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an upward
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 trend but
afterthat
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after that
 the rate of percentage of
divorce
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was
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started decreasing in
Finland
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however
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 , Sweden saw
a
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the
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 opposite trend it started
increased
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increasing
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 the cases of
divorce
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 after 2011. Looking in more
details
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detail
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, the proportion of
divorce
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 in Sweden stood at more than 40% , reached at nearly 50% in 2012 .
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tappering
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tapering
tapping
 off after 2 years to an almost identical level to that of in 2011 and reached
at
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 similar proportion of
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finland
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Finland
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 in 2011, at less
ghan
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than
 40%.
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, the figures saw
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase in
Finland
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 until 2014 After that it showed constant value which was nearly more than 40% in
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year
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years
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 2014 and 2015 respectively.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, finland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • divorce rates
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • trough
  • trend
  • notable
  • significant
  • substantial
  • higher
  • lower
  • comparison
  • consistent
  • vary
  • percent
  • overall
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