The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The line chart depicts the information regarding the proportion of urbanisation in various countries
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the philippines
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philippines
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,
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,Thailand and Indonesia during the year
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1970 to 2020 and
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the estimated values from 2030 to 2040.The data is calibrated in percentage.
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, it is noticeable that the interest of people moving to urban areas
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all countries will be showing an upward trend in the upcoming years. The
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philippines
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netizen showed a downward trend in the year 1990 to 2010.others described the upward trend despite the fluctuations. Looking into more details, the population used to move in cities in 1970 was 30% in
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and
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respectively . The figures for
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experienced a negligible fall in 1990 ,
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,it saw gradual growth and
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to reach
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the
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peak point (more than 90%).
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philippines
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surpass
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the proportion of
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in 1990 ,but it showed
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fluctuations and reached
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nearly 50%.From 1970 to 2000 , the ratio for
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Thailand
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was
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increased by nearly 5% and 15% ,correspondingly . In 2000,
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overtakes the
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Thailand
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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "described" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • trend
  • percentage
  • urban population
  • actual data
  • predictions
  • steady increase
  • striking difference
  • projection
  • fluctuation
  • contributing factors
  • demographic changes
  • socio-economic development
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