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The illustrate present data about the diagram of the space rectangle of the new region.

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The
illustrate present
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 data about the diagram of the space rectangle of the new region.
Overall
, the majority of housing surrounds almost the entire district
combine
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combined
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 with a total of seven roads in and in light of the fact that
this
 place is divided into
two
 main sections. For
circular
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the circular
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 campus inside,
this
 site is
also
 enveloped by housing and nearby the ubiquity of building recreational areas.In the center of
location
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the location
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 where there are
two
 bus stands and outstanding with
two
parkings
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parking
 opposite.
Additionally
, the roundabout
include
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includes
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fours
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four
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 exits and
the
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apply
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ring roads which
establish
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are established
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 in
north
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the north
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. For the location belt outside,there are numerous houses and
this
divides
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is divided
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 into five sites
other
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apply
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.
Besides
, the unique fact that the remaining
two
 industries were clearly separated from the
residence
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residences
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 which
are
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is
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also
 opposite
while
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with
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 one in the northwest and shortcoming in
earthsouth
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earth south
.
Finally
, especially the exit of small recreational areas
in
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at
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure a clear and comprehensive introduction and conclusion. These sections help frame your essay and guide your reader smoothly from one part to another.
supported main points
Provide more specific examples and details to support your points. This will make your essay more convincing and coherent.
logical structure
Work on connecting your ideas more logically with appropriate linking words and phrases. This will improve the overall flow and coherence of your essay.
introduction conclusion present
You have provided a general overview of the diagram, which is a good practice for task 1 essays.
complete response
Your essay contains relevant information pertaining to the diagram and attempts to discuss the main features of the new region.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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