The illustrate present data about the diagram of the space rectangle of the new region.

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data about the diagram of the space rectangle of the new region.

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, the majority of housing surrounds almost the entire district

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with a total of seven roads in and in light of the fact that

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place is divided into

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main sections. For

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campus inside,

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site is

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enveloped by housing and nearby the ubiquity of building recreational areas.In the center of

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where there are

two

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bus stands and outstanding with

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parkings

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parking

opposite.

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, the roundabout

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fours

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exits and

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ring roads which

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north

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. For the location belt outside,there are numerous houses and

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divides

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into five sites

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, the unique fact that the remaining

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industries were clearly separated from the

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which

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also

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opposite

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while

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one in the northwest and shortcoming in

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earth south

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, especially the exit of small recreational areas

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the bottommost.

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introduction conclusion present

Ensure a clear and comprehensive introduction and conclusion. These sections help frame your essay and guide your reader smoothly from one part to another.

supported main points

Provide more specific examples and details to support your points. This will make your essay more convincing and coherent.

logical structure

Work on connecting your ideas more logically with appropriate linking words and phrases. This will improve the overall flow and coherence of your essay.

introduction conclusion present

You have provided a general overview of the diagram, which is a good practice for task 1 essays.

complete response

Your essay contains relevant information pertaining to the diagram and attempts to discuss the main features of the new region.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

150 words

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The illustrate present data about the diagram of the space rectangle of the new region.

Fully explain your ideas

These days, in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this? How could more people be encouraged to come into the teaching profession?

"Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up." To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think young people should be required to have full time education until they are at least 18 years old. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that a country will benefit greatly by a high percentage of young people going to universities. Others argue that it only leads to a higher unemployment rate. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.