You recently received a letter from a friendasking for advice about whether to goto college or to try to get a job.You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend.In your letter Say why she/he wouldn't enjoy going to college Explain why getting a job is a good for him/her Suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

Dear Guli I am writing
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ask about your study.As you said before you have a problem I
guest
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you can't choose.Let me.Help you.You have
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2 options going to
college
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get
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a job. In my point of
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you shouldn't go to
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college
.Because you already know 2 languages.You can play any kind of instrument that's why I am offering do you get a job.You have learnt
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you need.You don't have to
kill
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the
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time at
college
.You are too smart for
college
.
AsI
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As I
mentioned before getting a job is
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idea.Because you can make money.If you start working you will
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communicate with others easily and
then
you can work on your career.You can find your way to develop. You are
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talented and you have a knack for everything I truly believe. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Toshtemirova Shakhnoza
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph has a single clear idea. This will help make your writing more structured and easier to follow.
task achievement
Make sure to fully justify your opinions. Explain why you think your friend will benefit from getting a job rather than going to college with stronger points and specific examples.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for this type of correspondence.
greeting and closing
You've included a greeting and a closing, which help make the letter feel complete and polished.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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