You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems.You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter: •introduce yourself •explain the situation •say what action you would like the company to take

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing to
complaint
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about
camera
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the camera
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to the
company
. I have recently bought
new
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a new
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the
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camera
.When
,
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I brought it home, the
camera
wasn'
t
working.I found it had some problems.
Also
,I am
applied
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to the
company
.
Firstly
, My name is Komosh. I am sixteen years old. I am
student
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a student
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.I am interested in photography.
Finally
,I bought a
camera
,
however
, the
camera
didn'
t
work, I was so surprised.I can'
t
take pictures and it turns off automatically.
Next
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day, I visited your
company
, I returned it.
Secondly
,I went to the
company
and gave my complaint. I talked to
worker
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the worker
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, one of your representatives, who assured me that the
camera
would be replaced within 48 But,I haven'
t
heard from you for three days.When
,
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I called her again, but, she told me
wait
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to wait
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a few more days. I want to change the
camera
.I still believe in your
company
. Everyone can be wrong. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully. Komosh
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure to use appropriate linking words and avoid abrupt transitions. For example, 'Therefore' instead of 'Firstly' in some cases, and ensuring each paragraph flows logically into the next.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a single idea. For example, the introduction of yourself and your interest in photography could be placed in the same paragraph.
task achievement
The letter generally addresses all parts of the prompt but could be clearer in some areas. For example, specify the model of the camera and the exact nature of the defect.
task achievement
Maintain a formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid contractions like 'I can't'. Instead, use 'I cannot'.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are appropriately formal and polite.
task achievement
You have made a clear attempt to explain the situation and provide a detailed account of your actions, which is good for task achievement.

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