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You have just started a course in a college which has no sports facilities of its own. Write a letter to the manager of the nearest private sports club . In your letter • introduce yourself • say why you are interested in this sports club • ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, members , costs

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest
to
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in
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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club
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your
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 community college. I am applying for
this
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 post in response to an advertisement which was published in
local
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the local
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 daily newspaper a
course
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couple
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 of days ago . My name is Baxtinur Kholliyeva and I am a new student at the local college and would like to inquire about the facilities and membership options for your private sports
club
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. I am interested in exploring the opportunities provided by your
club
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 . I am
also
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 interested to know about
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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club
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. I am expecting a comprehensive reply from you
since
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apply
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about the details of the activities and other information I requested. I
kindy
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kindly
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 request information regarding the sports facilities available, including types of sports, professional trainers, operating system and membership fees. I have been training with volleyball
game
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games
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 when I
playing
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 in the gym.
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, I do not know enough
informations
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information
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 about it. So , I have a lot of questions about your
sport
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sports
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club
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. There are: 1) How much does the
club
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 cost? 2 ) How many days a week is there? 3 ) What time is the
club
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 day or night? I hope you quickly reply Yours faithfully , Baxtinur Kholliyeva
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single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea or theme to enhance clarity and readability.
logical structure
Use paragraphing more effectively to separate different parts of your letter for a clearer logical structure.
suitable writing tone
Double-check for grammatical accuracy and ensure sentences flow smoothly.
complete response
Include specific details and personal experiences to make your request more engaging and convincing.
complete response
You have introduced yourself and stated the purpose of your letter well.
complete response
Your letter covers the essential questions about the sports club facilities and membership.
suitable writing tone
You have made a polite request for further information, which is appropriate for the context.
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