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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below shows how
instant
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noodles
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 are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The image shows a flowchart of how
instant
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noodles
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 are manufactured, starting with storage silos, a mixer with water and flour,
dough
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 sheets and strips, noodle discs, cooking and drying machine, and ending with vegetables and spices, cups, labelling, and sealing, and labels. The diagrams illustrate the
process
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 involved in the manufacturing of
instant
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noodles
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.
Overall
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, the production of
instant
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noodles
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 involves several stages
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 as mixing water and flour, shaping
dough
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, cooking and drying, adding vegetables and spices, packaging in cups,
labeling
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labelling
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, and sealing. The initial stage of the manufacturing
process
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 begins with the storage silos, where the raw materials are kept before processing. The next step involves mixing water and flour in a mixer to form a
dough
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.
This
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dough
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 is
then
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 rolled out into sheets and cut into strips to create noodle discs.
Subsequently
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, the noodle discs pass through a cooking and drying machine which prepares them for consumption. In the final stages of production, the
noodles
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 are enriched with vegetables and spices to enhance
flavor
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flavour
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. The finished product is
then
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 packaged in cups,
labeled
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labelled
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 with
necessary
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the necessary
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 information, and sealed for distribution. The
labeling
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labelling
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process
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 includes adding essential details and instructions for consumers.
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, the manufacturing
process
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 encompasses various stages that ensure the quality and packaging of
instant
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noodles
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, noodles, dough, process with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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