Some people believe that school children should do their class work individually. Other people believe that sometimes class work should be done in small groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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individually. The rest of
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believe that small
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is a good choice
to do
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class work
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss both
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and give my own opinion. On one hand, there are many benefits of individual work
such
as focus, accountability and
self reliance
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. The primary
lead
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children
easily to learn since they can
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without any
distraction
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distractions
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from others.
Secondly
, it makes
children
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responsible
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their own learning which they can assess individual progress.
Moreover
,
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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will know about
children
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ability
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abilities
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and
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the part
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part
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parts
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that
difficult
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for them.
Thirdly
,
children
will be more independent and self-reliant which can be
usefull
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useful
skills
in the future.
On the other hand
,
group
work can encourage
children
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collaboration and communication
skills
which are important not only educational but
also
professional field. The student will be able to develop a solution by discussion with their friends.
Furthermore
, it
also
bring
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a diverse view
about
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the problems.
For instance
, in a science
group
divided into four
people
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is
discussion
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a discussion
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about conservation. Every student has their own opinion that can
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their critical thinking. The
last
is mutual support
who
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can give motivation
for
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all of the
people
in a
group
. In my own perspective, it is better to balance
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for
children
both individual and
group
. It will
be
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develop various
skills
such
as
self-reliant
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, collaboration and communication. In conclusion, Individual
task
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tasks
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lead
several
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advantages for
children
such
as focus
to solve
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on solving
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the
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problem
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problems
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, accountability and
self reliance
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self-reliance
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.
However
, the
others
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other tasks
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task
also
lead
benefits
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to benefits
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such
as
motivated
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, diverse knowledge and collaboration
skills
.
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task achievement
Your essay covers both perspectives and provides a balanced view, which is key for task achievement. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing that sometimes make your points less clear. Try to check your work for verb agreement, prepositions, and sentence structures.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. Still, the introduction could be slightly more engaging and concise. Additionally, make sure each paragraph clearly supports your central argument by ensuring better transition between points within each paragraph.
task achievement
Your points are relevant and you have included specific examples, such as the science group discussion, which is great. To improve, try to elaborate a bit more on how exactly these points and examples support your main argument.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow within paragraphs. For instance, ensuring that each sentence naturally follows from the previous one will make your essay easier to read. Consider using more linking words and phrases to illustrate the connections between ideas clearly.
task achievement
You have effectively discussed both viewpoints and provided a balanced opinion, which is essential for a high-scoring essay.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and fulfill their roles well, summarizing the main points of the essay.
task achievement
Using a specific example such as the science group discussion strengthens your argument and illustrates your points well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Individual Work Related Vocabulary:**
  • - Focus
  • - Concentration
  • - Personalized learning
  • - Accountability
  • - Self-reliance
  • - Independent
  • **Group Work Related Vocabulary:**
  • - Collaboration
  • - Teamwork
  • - Communication skills
  • - Diverse perspectives
  • - Mutual support
  • - Engagement
  • - Motivation
  • **Opinion and Discussion Vocabulary:**
  • - Balanced approach
  • - Skill development
  • - Lifelong learning
  • - Varied methods
  • - Subject suitability
  • - Critical thinking
  • - Memorization
  • - Practice
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