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The maps below show a cafe 10 years ago, 5 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a cafe 10 years ago, 5 years ago and now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps describe the information regarding the
prosposed
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proposed
 changes in
cafeteria
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the cafeteria
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 from
a
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the
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 decade to
present
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the present
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.
Overall
, over the period, the area witnessed dramatic changes. There
is
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are
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few
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a few
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 areas are
remained
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remain
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 unchanged
while
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counter
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a counter
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 can
see
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be seen
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 nowadays. The number and pattern of
tables
also
 changed over the years. As
the
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per the
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 proposal, there
is
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has been
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 no change
for
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in
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 food preparation,
rest rooms
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restrooms
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, cash desk and
enternce
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entrance
 over the 10 years to
till
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apply
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now.
Moreover
, the
propotion
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proportion
 of
terrace
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the terrace
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 was divided into two sections where
tables
 were
setup
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set up
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 later the number of
tables
is
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increased
due to
 the demand
of
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for
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cafe
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cafes
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.
In addition
to
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apply
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it
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apply
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, In the centre ,
symmetry
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the symmetry
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 for
tables
 has been changed
as
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to
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 a square form
instead
 of
circular
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a circular
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 shape. The counter is
setup
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set up
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 opposite
ti
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to
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 the cash desk which was not present in the previous year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 5 times.
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