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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given graph indicates how the figures for production levels of the main sorts of fuel changed in the UK from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, the
figure
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 for Coal declined
while
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 the statistics for both
Petroleum
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 and Natural
Gas
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 witnessed an increase during
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 period. In 1981, the
figure
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 for Coal started at 80
energy
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units
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. After 5
years
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, there was a slight decrease to 61 in the data on Coal. After undergoing a slight decline of 2
energy
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units
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 in 1991, the
figure
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 for that significantly went down to 40
energy
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units
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 for the next five
years
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. In 2000, the data on that hit the lowest point at 39
energy
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units
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. The
figure
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 for
Petroleum
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 started at 85
energy
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units
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 and outnumbered that for Natural
Gas
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 with a margin of 25
energy
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units
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 in 1981.
While
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 the data on
Petroleum
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 witnessed
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remarkable growth to 140
energy
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units
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, the
figure
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 for Natural
gas
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 remains unchanged after five
years
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. After undergoing a decrease of 40
energy
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units
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 in 1991, the
figure
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 for
Petroleum
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 reached 140
energy
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units
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 for the next 9
years
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.
In addition
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, after 14
years
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, the
figure
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 for Natural
gas
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 significantly went up to 100
energy
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units
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, petroleum, gas, energy, units, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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