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Do the benefits of artificial intelligence outweigh the potential risks?

#intelligence #risks
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These days AI which
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 for artificial intelligence help
human kind
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 to do a
lot
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 of
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 faster and
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. Many students find the solutions easier now. But
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 and disadvantages
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foods
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,
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, …. But about AI we have many different
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that
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some of them
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benefits
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 are more and outweigh the
risk
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 and some
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thinks
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 different way.in my opinion
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 of AI outweigh the potential risks.
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lets
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 which
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are so well-known. One
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advantages
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 is that it
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human
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 educational needs,
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 emotional issues.
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 which is viral is auto driver
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 AI and
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 AI is deciding
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road
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all
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is
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 of AI. Another example is so popular chatbot, chat
gpt
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GPT
 which
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 developed by Open AI.
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 chatbot was
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 of the incredible
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 that
introduced
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 in 2022. It
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 us a
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. If I want to mention something, for
student
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 like me it is so useful because we have some problem and we give it to
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the
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 direct way which is so easy to understand. These are very small
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reasons for
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advantages
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 of AI.
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risk
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airplane
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 give us
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lot
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 high speed. It
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 us to save time
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 travel but it has some risks
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 maybe falls and many
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 die. Ships give us
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 ability to move huge and heavy
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world
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 but it has
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sea
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. Anything in
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trade off
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 and disadvantages and
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end
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we decide
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not
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 something. About AI many
people
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 think they will lose their
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job
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 in future because AI can do their duty and companies do their
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job
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 with AI
with
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 lower
price
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 I agree with them but don’t forget we have many cases like
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 called washing horses. After the
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 disappeared but many
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job
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 like mechanic, carwash and …..
has
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 been created and
people
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this kind
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 of jobs.
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word
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benefits
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 and potential
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risk
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risks
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 and
human kind
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humankind
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decide
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 to
use
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 these
things
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. AI helps us in many ways and they are a
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out
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 life which is not defined
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 AI and
some day
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someday
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 maybe AI
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 humans in that part. AI is useful and
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use
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this
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 unbelievable innovation
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grammar vocabulary
Ensure that key terms and phrases are spelled correctly. For example, 'AI' should be used consistently without spelling out 'artificial intelligence' every time.
coherence cohesion
Strengthen the logical flow of ideas by using more transition words and phrases to connect your points smoothly. For instance, words like 'additionally', 'moreover', 'however' could help.
task achievement
Support main points with more detailed and specific examples. While you mention self-driving cars and ChatGPT, elaborating further with real-life instances or statistics can strengthen your argument.
task achievement
The essay clearly acknowledges both the benefits and risks of artificial intelligence, demonstrating an understanding of the topic's complexity.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, giving the essay a complete structure.
coherence cohesion
The use of specific examples like self-driving cars and ChatGPT helps to illustrate the points made, even if more detail is needed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Efficiency
  • Productivity
  • Cost savings
  • Diagnosis
  • Personalized treatment
  • Healthcare outcomes
  • Job displacement
  • Economic disruption
  • Unemployment
  • Privacy
  • Security
  • Hacking
  • Misuse
  • Ethical considerations
  • Bias
  • Decision-making
  • Automation
  • Sustainability
  • Environmental impact
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